教师六招破解雅思大作文开头难的困境——6分的突破，需要怎样的开头

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1、热身问题？

辩论类和分析类雅思大作文开头段分别写什么？

怎样的开头段才不俗？

开头段越长越好吗？

开头段如何制造亮点？

2、这两个开头段，亲们怎么看？

题目1：Some exports believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the disadvantages outweigh the disadvantages?

5分开头段示例：Nowadays, foreign languages are playing increasingly important roles in society and an increasing amount of children have begun to learn foreign languages in their primary schools. However, in the meantime, whether it is beneficial has sparked much debate among the public. Some people argue that it is harmful to learn the foreign languages so early, while others assert that learning foreign languages in primary schools can bring a lot of advantages. In my opinion, I am in favor of the latter view. The reasons are as follows.

题目2：C4-Test4 学生行为问题P101-169

In many countries schools have severe problems with student behaviour.

What do you think are the cause of this?

What solutions can you suggest?

5分开头段示例：In this age of change, with the development of technology, the human society is advancing at an amazing speed on various fronts. Yet at the same time, many problems have arisen, a serious one of which is the issue of poor student behaviour in many countries. This problem may have significant negative influence on society and individuals. In the following essay, I am going to analyse the possible causes of this problem and put forward some solutions.

3、开头段应该写多长？

剑桥雅思20篇6分以上范文开头字数统计

4、开头应该写什么？

背景/矛盾争议+个人立场？

仅背景/矛盾争议？

仅个人立场？

4.1 中规中矩——“背景介绍/矛盾争议+个人立场”或“引出问题+写作意图”

第一句（介绍背景）Nowadays, （it is generally/widely believed that） + 讨论对象 are playing （increasingly） important/crucial roles in our lives（教育、工作等）. 或对于坏现象，如pollution或unemployment，可以说In the present age, （it is commonly believed that） the issue/problem of … is increasingly/more and more severe/serious.

第二句（引出矛盾/争议）But in the meantime, whether+ 争议的焦点（句子） has sparked much debate. 或But in the meantime, the view that… (有一种观点的辩论话题) has provoked much controversy.

第三句（矛盾双方观点）While some people believe that+ 一方观点，many others argue that+ 另一方观点.

第四句（个人立场） Personally, I agree with / am in favour of the former view/the latter view. 或 I disagree with/ am against this point of view.或I think...because/since...

4.2 单刀直入——直接表达个人立场

C3-Test2 科技发展与传统灭绝 P28-P162

When a country develops its technology; the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Overall, I disagree with the opinion expressed. I would like to begin by pointing out that ‘traditional skills and ways of life’ are not automatically of one country, but of a culture or community.

4.3 埋下伏笔——个人立场在结尾而非开头

C7-Test1 天赋vs教育 P66-68

It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

The relative importance of natural talent and training is a frequent topic of discussion when people try to explain different levels of ability in, for example, sport, art or music.

In conclusion, I agree that any child can be taught particular skills, but to be really good in areas such as music, art or sport, then some natural talent is required.

5、六招破解开头难

5.1 第一招——背景扣题，矛盾争议准确转述

① ...越来越重要

play an increasingly crucial/essential/important/significant/indispensable[？nd？'spens？b(？)l]) role in…

② 越来越多的人/物...

a/an growing/increasing/rising amount/number of…

③ ...变得越来越流行/普遍

sth/doing…is increasingly prevalent/ widespread/popular recently

④ (负面背景)……的问题越来越严重

The problem/issue of/that … is becoming increasingly severe/serious/ worrying/ disturbing)...

⑤...彻底改变我们的生活

…has transformed (或completely/significantly changed) our lives

⑥ (科技/经济/社会)以惊人的速度向前发展…

...is advancing/developing at an amazing speed in present-day society

5.2 第二招——废话少（字数恰当），重实质（认为、连词无好坏，框架结构）

要表示“认为”，think/believe能用吗？

5.3 第三招——灵活替代和指代

5分标准——由于指代和替换不足显得行文重复

6分标准：有时无法保持一贯清晰或恰当地使用指代

5.4 第四招——同义转换

同义词替换；

换词性；

换结构（主动宾与主系表互换，主动与被动互换，姐妹句型互换，分词与从句互换）；

姐妹句型：doing/to do作主语； it+谓语（如is/was+形容词）+（for sb）to do；

定语从句/分词作定语

名词（人/物）+that/who/which/when/where/why+定语从句（不完整的苹果）

汉语转到英语的变化步骤：a.以“的”为中心把定语从句和名词互换位置；b.把“的”换为that/who/which；c.把定语从句和名词分别翻译成英语（注意动词是主动还是被动）。

1) 关在笼子里的动物；

2) 那些生活在野外的动物；

3) 代表他们国家的运动员；

4) 拥有最健康最强壮的身体的运动员；

5) 那些不自信或不与队友有效合作的运动员；

定语从句换分词的两步：先把that/which/who去掉，找到动词根据主动和被动关系分别使用doing和done的分词，注意被动情况下用分词时be动词要去掉。

5.5 第五招——123456原则

1个强调句型；

It is +被强调部分（主语、宾语、状语）that/who+句子剩余部分

It is the life experience and education that shape people’s personality and determine how it develops.

2个倒装句（部分倒装，即使用一般疑问语序）；

绝不：by no means, on no account, in no way/case

On no account/by no means is it a waste of time and money to protect wild animals.

不但...而且...：not only...but also...

Not only should more eco-friendly vehicles and fuels be developed, but also it is crucial to make public transport services more convenient and affordable.

只有...才...：only when/if/with...，...

Only when/if effective measures are taken by both government and individuals, can we gradually address the obesity problem among the public.

3个分词作定语（状语）；

4个定语从句；

5个状语从句（因为如果当…时虽然以至于）；

6种句型替换。

5.6 第六招——24K黄金短语

a) 结果(不好的)：end up with..., end up being..., end up doing,

b) 为了...起见：for the sake of...

c) 通过：by doing

d) 否则：otherwise

e) 如果没有：without...

f) 无论：no matter where/when/who/how/what

g) 不管...：regardless of...

h) 太...而不能...：too...to...

i) 既不...也不...：neither...nor...

j) 或者...或者...：either...or...

k) 在...方面，就...而言：in terms of...

l) The+比较级...，the+比较级...

m) 高分范文中的其它好词（切忌整句甚至整段照搬）

6、课后作业——写开头段

6.1 It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

6.2 In many countries schools have severe problems with student behaviour.

What do you think are the cause of this?

What solutions can you suggest?

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