托福独立写作高分之时间策略（五）

上一讲我们已经讲到在基本完成一篇独立写作的时候，剩下的1-2分钟就需要检查和修改。那么，我们需要注意些什么呢？笔者在这里认为有如下几个地方需要注意，
1. 文章的连贯性。（Cohesion）
文章的连贯性可以体现在句与句之间，段与段之间。句与句之间的的连贯性其实是看文章有没有逻辑性。这里面每个考生的思维逻辑可以是不同，所以就暂不讨论。段与段之间的连贯性我们可以用一些小小的技巧去体现。例如，在写完第一段论证到rest作为理由的时候，我们在展开第二段的论述的时候，可参考：
In addition to the issue of proper rest, I think a longer vacation period provides better opportunities to pursue short-term employment or work experience…

在第二段论证结束的时候，第三段开头同样可以：
Finally, in combination with better rest and work opportunities, I feel that one vacation period will help to make the semester system at schools more effective for actual study and learning…

2. 文章的可以有的让步。（Concession）
通常我们在写独立写作的时候是一边倒的策略，因为这样论证起来比较容易。但是往往很多时候考生在构思的时候其实是两边观点都可以想到的。这个时候往往就比较纠结两边都可以写的的观点。考生可以考虑在段中用让步的方式把自己的观点表达出来。例如：
To begin with, a longer vacation can be equated to more comprehensive rest from study. In most current education models, vacation periods can be as short as a couple of days to 1-2 weeks. While that amount of time can be fine for some students, I think for a majority of students, they are only really starting to unwind and truly relax at the end of this vacation time. Suddenly, they are faced with going back to their studies again. From my own experience at university, I never really managed to feel completely rested during the mid-year vacation periods. In fact, a lot of the time I felt like I was more exhausted at the end of this brief break than I was at the start of it!
[While ..., I think ...for a majority]

In addition, I think a longer vacation period provides better opportunities to pursue short-term employment or work experience. Consider, for example, students in law, business, scientific research or engineering trying to secure short-term work that is relevant to their field of study. It would involve a complicated process of searching for work opportunities, establishing contacts, preparing for formal interviews and waiting for the right type of position to come up. It’s true that for some students, this isn’t much of a priority, as they either do not need or do not want to work during their breaks. However, for those that do, it isn’t always easy to arrange work or – for that matter – actual job interviews for students. It takes time to look for and then apply for work. In addition, employers are more likely to be looking for people who can work for an entire month or even a couple of months with them – not 1-2 weeks. That is a bit of a shame, because getting paid work is very helpful to young college students, both to help fund their studies and/or to gain valuable work experience to supplement the focus of their majors. Having sufficient time to look for, apply for and actually do work would be better facilitated with one longer vacation block.
[It’s true that ... However, ...]

文章段中能够加上这些转折的话，会比较显示整体的客观性，同时也不会显得那么绝对。当然，考生在考试的时候也要根据情况而定，充分利用好时间，这样才能顾全大局，拿取高分。

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