雅思写作高分范文解析：犯罪类话题

雅思写作犯罪类话题：2016年1月14日雅思写作真题

A recent newspaper article reports that a 14-year-old boy who seriously destroyed his school got a punishment to clean streets instead of being sent to prison. Do you think this is right? Or the young criminals should be sent to the jail?

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雅思写作犯罪类话题高分范文：

News about adolescent delinquency is not “new” any more nowadays, and recently a teenager was punished to clean streets because he severely destroyed his school. Whether this sentence is proper is controversial. From my point of view, it is a good choice compared with sending him to prison.

As we know prison is a complicated place where there are various people, especially some real villains. If the teenage criminals were sent there, they would follow the negative models and become corrupted as they are not capable of telling right from wrong yet at that age. Moreover, if they were kept in prison, they would lose the precious opportunities of learning knowledge which is normally necessary and important for one’s career development. If they could not find a job after release in the future to maintain their life, they would probably break the law again and become the dangerous factors of society.

Compared with prison sentence, cleaning streets are more beneficial to other citizens or even the whole society. As we know, the money spent in building prison comes from tax payers, so if prison is not a must for those young people whose crimes are not too serious, it will reduce the burden of tax payers in some extent.
However, it is also understandable that some people worry that the alternative punishments like cleaning streets would be too lenient to have the deterrent effect. But according to the statistics of last year, about 40% of people become repetitive criminals after released from prison, which means prison is not as ideal as expected. When we take this into account, that concern seems to be not very necessary.

All in all, prison is not the only choice, especially if the criminals are still adolescents and their crimes are not very serious. The whole society should give them a chance to correct their misbehaviors and provide them a more appropriate means for their reform. After all they need to be better prepared for coming back to the society.
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雅思写作犯罪类话题高分范文解析：

此次是关于犯罪主题的文章，需要分析青少年犯罪后的处罚方式。关键词之一是青少年犯罪；关键词之二是处罚方式，概括了关监狱还是扫大街。

雅思写作犯罪类话题高分范文结构分析：

本文问共五段：

第一段是介绍，包括话题背景、题目引入、及亮明个人观点。笔者的观点是扫大街比送进监狱好。

第二段阐述进监狱有什么坏处：1、青少年进监狱容易和其他犯人学坏（假设论证）， 2、错过最好受教育时机，以后不好找工作，生活所迫很可能导致再次犯罪（假设论证）。

第三段阐述扫大街有什么好处：可以减轻纳税人负担（解释及假设论证）。

第四段让步+驳斥，尽管有人担心扫大街震慑作用不够是道理的，但考虑到出狱后很多人仍然重复犯罪，可见监狱的震慑作用也是有限，以此来反驳这些人担心是多余了（让步及反驳论证）。

第五段总结全文，再次亮明观点。

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雅思写作犯罪类话题高分范文高分词汇：

青少年犯罪：adolescent delinquency
有争议的：controversial
纳税人：tax payers
宽大的，仁慈的：lenient
替代性的：alternative

雅思写作犯罪类话题高分范文高分句型：

1. Whether +句子 is controversial. (主语从句)
E.g. Whether this sentence is proper is controversial.

2. If + 主语 + were … / did …, 主语 would + 动词原形. （第二条件式/虚拟语气）
E.g. If the teenagers were kept in prison, they would lose the precious opportunities of learning knowledge which is normally necessary and important for one’s career development.

3. Compared with …, 主+谓+宾 / 主+系+表 (非谓语动词)
E.g. Compared with prison sentence, cleaning streets are more beneficial to other citizens or even the whole society.

4. It is + adj + (that) +从句 (形式主语)
E.g. However, it is also understandable that some people worry that the alternative punishment means like cleaning streets would be too lenient to have the deterrent effect.

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