2015年3月28日李云老师雅思写作范文及解析

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Task 1

柱状图:

The charts below show the number of working hours in industrial sector in four European countries in 2002.

题目分析：

2015年柱状图是考试最热门的小作文类型，热度居高不下，本次的柱状图是四个国家工作时间的静态对比，单个看非常简单，但是数据较多，需要注意分类对比，找出重要的信息来汇报。同时，要注意词汇和句式的多样性和准确性。

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范文：

The given bar charts provide an overview of the industrial working time in France, Denmark, Sweden and UK in 2002.

In France, more than half of workers worked for 31 -35 hours, accounting for the largest proportion. The percentage of people working for 36 to 40 hours and 46 to 50 hours ranked the second and third place with 30% and 20% respectively.

By contrast, in Demark and Sweden, the majority of people (70% in Danmark,80% in Sweden)worked for 36 to 40 hours .People working for 31-35 hours and 41 to 45 hours came in the second and third place in these two countries (25% and 12% in Denmark, 35% and 30% in Sweden)

Similarly , in UK ，people working for 36 to 40 hours constituted for the largest proportion with a half. Interestingly, the number of workers increased with the growth of the working hours, except for the proportion of staff working for 36 to 40 hours.

To sum up , the average working hours in France was the shortest, while people in Sweden worked the longest hours.

相关练习素材及备考建议：

本篇柱状图是静态图，要注意对比，把主要特征描述出来。可参考剑5 test 2 不同年龄段人的学习的原因。

Task 2

Some people believe that the increasing use of computers and mobile phones for communication has had a negative effect on young people’s reading and writing skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

题目类型：Argumentation

提纲：

第一段：背景介绍，开门见山给出观点。

第二段：过度使用电脑手机等的负面影响之一影响阅读的质量和深度。

第三段：过度使用电脑手机的负面影响之二影响写作严谨性和独立思考的能力。

第四段：合理正确地使用电子产品能提高学生的读写能力。

第五段：电脑手机到底对人的读写能力有好的影响还是坏的影响是由具体的使用方式决定的。

Currently, youngsters’ growing dependence on electronic devices like computers and smart phone has drawn public attention. Some people argue that the overuse of electronic devices could pose threat to teenagers’ reading and writing literacy. In my view, whether electronic gadgets are detrimental or beneficial to the young’s reading and writing skills is up to the way how they are utilized. (宾语从句，主语从句，定语从句)

It is obviously reasonable for those to maintain the overuse of computers and smart phones could exert negative effect on the youngsters’ reading and writing capacity. Initially, the over reliance on electronic products could in the long run undermine a person’s reading quality and depth. Usually, the information and articles exposed online are cluttered with Internet language, which is featured by abbreviations and informal language which could not be utilized in formal academic settings. Immersed in these fast-food articles and information, youngsters have less time to appreciate high quality books and articles which are of social and academic significance. In this way, their reading proficiencies are degraded. （非谓语，非限制性定语从句，状语从句）

Also, the overuse of smart phones and computers could lower students’ grammatical accuracy and independent thinking ability, and thereby impair their writing literacy. As youngsters are passionate about online chatting where they chat with others in Internet lingo ,voice messages or vivid pictures rather than formal and quality language ,they become less aware of the importance of grammar correctness and independent writing skills. （并列句，原因状语从句）

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However, a part of citizens contend that the growing use of high-tech products could benefit students’ overall academic literacies. They believe the proper utilization of computers and smart phones could actually improve students’ reading capacity by providing a huge online database where they could access numerous useful reading resources . Besides, with the assistance of advanced software, one can not only check the grammatical accuracy of his or herself, but also proofread the articles composed by others easily. In this sense, the appropriate utilization of electronic products could exert a positive influence on the young. （定语从句，方式状语从句，定语从句）

To sum up, the influence of the increasing use of computers and smart phones is decided by the exact way how they are used. Over dependency on them could undermine the pupils’ academic literacy, while appropriate and smart utilization could contribute to the development of related skills. (被动，比较句)

话题词汇：

	词汇/短语	词义，词性	同意替换
1.	Dependence	依赖 N	reliance
2	overuse	过度使用 n
3	device	器具 n	gadget
4	Pose threat to	造成威胁	Exert negative effect on
5	utilize	利用 v
6	capacity	能力 n
7	undermine	削弱 v	impair
8	expose	暴露 v
9	be cluttered with	充满了
10	feature	以.. 为特色
11	Setting	场景 N
12	Be immersed in	沉浸在...
13	Fast-food articles	快餐文章n
14	Proficiency	能力 N
15	Grammatical	语法的 adj
16	literacy	读写能力 N
17	database	数据库 N
18	proofread	校对 v
19	Compose	写 v
20	.contribute to	促进 v