教师解析2015年01月29日雅思写作范文

Writing Task 1
　　流程图：
　　The diagram below shows how fruit is canned.
       

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

题目分析：
　　流程图3个月左右会出现一次，审题方面：
　　1. 注意细节，不要遗漏信息；
　　2. 不要畏惧生词；
　　3. 复杂程序适当合并。
　　
　　行文方面：
　　·时态：多用一般现在时；
　　·语态：被动语态居多；
　　·句式：综合运用不同句式，如从句、非谓语动词等；
　　·用词：灵活运用表示顺序的词，如
　　at first, initially, in the first stage/step;
　　previous, preceding, before, prior to;
　　then, next, following, after, subsequent;
　　finally, eventually

Sample answer:

Given is a flow chart illustrating a series of steps by which fruit is canned.

Prior to the actual canning process, it is first necessary for fresh fruit to be picked manually from trees. It is then transported to the cannery to get washed. After that, the clean fruit needs to pass a strict quality checking process. The ones with scars will be rejected while those with satisfactory quality will subsequently go through a cold storing process at a temperature below 0℃. Next, the fruit will be weighed and graded to ensure that the selected ones are of similar size. In the following stage, the fruit will be peeled, cored and sliced in order to be put into the cans.

When the cans are filled, they will be sealed and cooked over heat for sterilization. Once the cans cool down, they are labeled individually and stored together before the final despatch.

Thus, the diagram clearly demonstrates the canning procedure from fresh fruit to the final cans to be consumed in the market.

相关真题备考素材：C6T3, C8T3.

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Writing Task 2
　　Currently, some scientists or travelers like to travel to remote natural environment such as the South Pole. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

题目分析：
　　提问方式：辩论类；
　　作文题材：环境类；

　　提纲：
　　观点：远游各有优劣，但综合来说劣势居多
　　主体段一（让步：讨论远游的优势） 科学家深入探索自然、发现未知、促进人类进步；游者拓展视野，超越自我
　　主体段二（重点讨论远游的劣势） 少人涉足之地通常交通、设施落后，存在安全隐患；人类活动会对自然环境造成影响
　　结尾段 远行虽是大势所趋，但总体劣势较多

Sample answer：
　　The advancement of science and technology has rendered traveling to remote areas no longer a dream. Recent years have been witnessing the increasing popularity of distant places among scientists and travelers for natural exploration. While there are certainly valid arguments to the contrary, I personally believe that the drawbacks of remote traveling override its benefits.（while做并列连词，表对比）

Granted, the mystery of faraway areas makes them extremely attractive to adventurers. It is human nature to explore the unknown, and the human history is a relentless process of discovering the new. Only by the unceasing examination are we able to achieve breakthroughs and march forward in terms of both individuals as well as the society as a whole.（倒装句）

On the other hand, the sheer charm of remote places itself cannot ensure pleasant journeys. First and foremost, distant areas are poorly equipped more often than not. Many devices are just unable to work in extreme natural environment like the South Pole, which partially explains our limited knowledge of such places.（非限制性定语从句）Thus, visitors would be in peril in case of an emergency, since the visitors may not get treated timely or simply not treated at all if they get no companions.（原因状语从句）In addition, human activities may exert adverse influence on the natural environment, and it is always too late before we realize the consequences of our actions.

In the final analysis, I concede that it is probably an irreversible trend to travel to remote places with the development of modern society.（宾语从句）Nonetheless, we should be cautious about distant visits considering safety factors at the present stage and potential effects that we may produce on the environment（定语从句）.

高分词汇：
　　1 advancement n. 进步
　　2 render v. 使得
　　3 witness v. 见证
　　4 exploration n. 探索，探险
　　5 to the contrary  相反
　　6 granted adv. 诚然
　　7 adventurer n. 探险者
　　8 relentless a. 不懈的
　　9 unceasing a. 不断的
　　10 breakthrough n. 突破
　　11 in terms of  就…而言
　　12 on the other hand  然而(表转折)
　　13 sheer a. 完全的，纯粹的
　　14 more often than not  多半，通常
　　15 in peril  处于极大危险
　　16 companion n. 同行者，同伴
　　17 exert v. 施加
　　18 adverse a. 不利的，有害的
　　19 concede v. 承认，让步
　　20 irreversible a. 不可逆转的
　　21 cautious a. 谨慎的

　　
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