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2014-11-11 来源:新通外语网igo99.cn 作者:沈贇 阅读量: 手机阅读

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  教育类话题是托福写作的高频话题之一。本文中,新通外语沈赟老师为考生准备了一篇托福写作教育类高分范文,并给出了详细的分析,一定会对童鞋们的备考有所帮助。

Some people think university professors should spend more time doing research while others think they should spend more time educating students. 

The duty of the teacher in higher education is literally as complicated as it is. Reasonable as it looks at first sight, focusing more on instructing students does not complete the most value of a professor. Several factors, such as teaching skills, the quality of knowledge as well as the contribution to the society, contribute to the issue. There-fore, I note that the research deserves more attention from the professors. The reasons will be further illustrated as follows.

开头解析:第一句话可能对部分同学来说就翻译不来了, as…as it is 这里其实有两个结构 as…as“ 如什么一样”和as it is “看样子,照现在看来”,所以整句话的意思就是“老师在高等教育中的职责如字面上一样复杂”。第二句就用了倒装,as在这里有尽管的意思千万不能忘。

第三句是一句套句,several factors,a,b as well as c contri-bute to the is-sue,表示对这个问题而言a,b,c这三个因素都起到了作用。第四句是一个明确的观点表达,绝对不能照抄题目,要显示一下自己的语言变化能力。最后一句为万能套句。

First, teaching skills can be shaped through the process of research.  When doing research, such as conducting the experiment, it is inevitable for professors to encounter certain problems and dilemmas. Once they successfully conquer the problems, they would have a whole brand new cognition towards the study.

This new understanding stands for the improvement of their own ability and will facilitate the professor’s teaching  skills. For example, back when I was in university, my tutor developed a fresh method of teaching in physics after his breakthrough in his research in friction study.  In other words, spending more time in doing research will finally pay off in a professor’s improvement in teaching.

词汇解析:shape 也可做动词用,在这里译为塑造
  dilemma:两难,困境 
  conquer 在这里等同于overcome,go over,译为克服
   a whole brand new:全新的
   stand for: 代表  
  facilitate 有助于,可以用来替换improve 
  pay off 动词词组,回报,得到偿还

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Second, the students can benefit from the cutting-edge knowledge bred from the research. Given the fact that a professor is the major resource for a student to master the abstruse knowledge, which is hard to be learned by oneself, the professor is responsible to work diligently through research to impart the students with the newly outcome of the study.

According to the survey carried out by Youth Magazine previously among the students in an anonymous university, 72% of students confided that they would rather have their professors spend more time in research for that the outcome of research will influence their depth of study to a large extent.

While only 28% of students prefer to have their teachers care their study more. In order to bring the best knowledge to the students, professors are expected to spare no effort to their research.

词汇解析:cutting-edge 形容词,尖端的
  given the fact that 表考虑到...;由于...
  abstruse:深奥的
  work diligently替换work hard
  impar替换teach
  confide 透露
  to a large extent 副词词组,很大程度上
  be expected to 替换should 同样还有 be supposed to
  spare no effort 替换 try one’s best

Third, the outcome of research will speed up the advancement of the society. Since professors in universities are normally of higher intellectual level, their research is closely connected with the state-of-the-art technology, which is key to the revolution to people’s life. If the professors put more attention to the research, a great chance is that they can bring about the change to the development of the society.

For example, the famous communication tool Wechat was firstly devised in Wuhan university, China, in the research conducted by professor Zhang. In a very short time, this tool has become prevailing in people’s daily life and brought a lot of convenience to the daily work.

词汇解析:state-of-the-art 形容词性,最先进的
  a great chance is that  很有可能

主体段解析:这三段的结构都非常明确:中心句+论证+例证+段落总结句。这里需要注意的点是:中心句必须是整段的结论,必须简洁,必须放在段落的首句;论证最好用到因果论证,因此不可缺少的就是使用“因为,所以,由于,导致”这些词,论证是这一段落的核心,这个部分必须显示自己的思维和语言能力,这个部分处理不好这个段落基本也就那样了;例子一定要避免流水账,达到配合论证就可以点到为止了,因为大部分例子为编造,所以多说多错;段落的总结不一定需要,但最好首尾呼应。

All things considered, I reckon that it would be a wise decision if professors in university spend more time doing research for the benefits discussed above.
  结尾解析:结尾并不是非常重要,通常是开头的重复,只做到结构的完整性即可,在时间有限,结尾段没打完的情况下不会对整篇文章的评分造成特别大的影响。

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