托福写作：考生应避免的25种病句（2）

大陆语系与欧美语系在本质上有很大的不同，考生会在写作中写出许多中国式英语，下面就为大家罗列了25种考生会犯的错误，并将它们一一改正过来，希望对考生有帮助。

1. The artist’s work pushes our civilization to a higher level.

改进：Artists’ work upgrades our civilization.

2. For example, you work in a big factory.(这个病句在托福写作中出现的很多。)

改进: Suppose you work in a big factory.

3. You’ll find you are fit for business and you can make it your main job.

改进：You’ll find that you are cut out for business and you can make it your career.

4. We will own nothing at all if we depend on luck.

改进: We will get nowhere if we rely on luck.

5. He will get a higher salary to improve his living level.

改进: He will get a higher salary, thus improving his life.

6. Their brain is still very young.(这个病句在托福写作中出现的很多。)

改进: They are still immature.

7. Dissatisfaction makes people produce desire for better things.

改进: Dissatisfaction impels people for the better.

8. They can’t analyze clearly what is right and what is wrong.

改进: They cannot tell right from wrong.

9. It will help children to form a good habit of dealing with time.

改进: It will help children learn to make good use of time.

10. Though it is not the best job, it afford to his life.

改进: Though it is not the best job, a job is a job. He can make ends meet with it.

11. Since people are always not satisfied with their present situation, they want further development.

改进: Since people are never satisfied with their status quo, they want further development.

12. The only thing they need to do is to find a job which can easily get big money.

改进: The only thing they need to do is to find a job that can bring them big money.

13. They like an active life but not a peaceful life.

改进: They like an active life rather than a peaceful one.

14. Some cigarettes may even cost a larger sum of money.

改进: Some cigarettes may cost even more.

15. Firstly, dissatisfaction encourages the discovery of new products.

改进: Firstly, dissatisfaction encourages the invention of new products.

16. Insgroupsto suit the needs of enteringsintoswork, students must grasp some technical skills.

改进: Insgroupsto meet the needs of future work, students must learn some practical skills.

17. It is very necessary more qualified scientists and technicians.

改进: Qualified scientists and technicians are in great demand.

18. This knowledge will become a part of your body.

改进: This knowledge will become part of you.

19. They cannot think clearly.

改进: They cannot think straight.

20. Money can improve their living standard.

改进: Money can improve their life.

21. Parents always think that children will get a good job and earn a lot of money.

改进: Parents always expect their children to get a good job and earn a lot of money.

22. If a student only cares about money, will lead to be unhappy all his life.

改进: If a student only cares about money, he will be misled and will be unhappy all his life.

23. One purpose of education is to study the way in which he studies later.

改进: One purpose of education is to learn to learn.

24. Many parents arrange their children go to learn piano.(这种典型的中式思维的病句在托福写作中出现的很多。)

改进: Many parents send their children to piano classes.

25. When I want to absorb somebody else’s opinion, I will study with others.

改进: When I need second opinion, I will study with others.

考生可以发现有些病句，如果我们不提出来，考生自己是很难发现有问题，所以考生最好多结合这次的病句对自己的文章进行一次大检查。