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新托福写作的评分标准比较高，在语言上的考察点也是非常多而杂，所以大家对于新托福考试在语言上的考察一定要有足够的重视，尤其是一些常见的错误，大家更要注意予以避免。
大家在托福写作中经常会犯一些错误，除了不断的练习外，大家也要善于修改自己的作文，不断完善自己的写作。本文为大家总结一些大家在新托福作文中容易犯的错误，供大家参考。
托福写作中的一些句型错误屡见不鲜，考生需要注意不要用错句型犯一些低级错误，谨记在作文中想要提高和有所突破，打好基础是大前提。
大家想要在新托福作文考试中取得好成绩，除了不断练习以外，还需要对自己的作文进行修改，并且不断总结。本文为大家例举了一些在大家的作文中经常会出现的病句，大家对照自己的作文进行修改。
新托福作文中如果出现出病句，对大家想要在新托福写作中取得好成绩的影响是很大的 。下面例举的50个病句是考生们在完成新托福作文时经常出现的，我们一起来看看修改后的句子，避免犯同样的错误。
托福考试的作文中，大家普遍都会出现“病句”的问题，大家在平时一定要养成为自己的文章进行修改的习惯。本文为大家例举了十三句托福作文的病句以及改进后的句子，大家可以参考一下。
考生在写作时，时常会写一些错误的句子，自己都不自觉，下面就为大家罗列了25种中国考生常会犯的一些错误，特别是介词的使用上，考生一定要留心。
因为中国和欧美国家的思维方式的区别，考生在写作时，常会出现中国式英语，有些词汇虽然有你想要表达的意思，但是在欧美国家，他们并不会使用这种方式来表达某些意思，考生一定要注意这方面的问题。
大陆语系与欧美语系在本质上有很大的不同，考生会在写作中写出许多中国式英语，下面就为大家罗列了25种考生会犯的错误，并将它们一一改正过来，希望对考生有帮助。
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托福写作：病句大作战
新托福写作的评分标准比较高，在语言上的考察点也是非常多而杂，所以大家对于新托福考试在语言上的考察一定要有足够的重视，尤其是一些常见的错误，大家更要注意予以避免。
造句要做到准确、多样以及高分表达
I 准确的句子表达
1. 句型分析
英语的句型包括以下几种，简单句、复合句、并列句、并列复合句等。在新托福写作中，一般使用复合句，辅以并列句和并列复合句，当然肯定要有简单句，做到长短句相结合。下面摘抄几个句子给大家认识并分析一下复合句和并列复合句。
a. Even though I usually know what I have to say, I cannot always express myself correctly in English.
这句话是一个复合句，由even though引导的让步状语从句。
b. This challenges me to practice my spoken English, with the result that I can complete the speaking tasks more fluently and quickly.
这句话中是一个复合句。with介词结构中，有一个that引导的同位语从句对result进行解释说明。
c. I think this is less than ideal because any differences in opinion become personal conflicts, and therefore that might jeopardize the employee’s job.
上句话是一个并列复杂句。and 连接了两个句子，是一个并列句;because引导的原因状语从句。
d. Shallow writing is indicative of weak critical-thinking skills, and such writing, which is often described as “sophomoric”, receives low mark.
这句话同样是并列复杂句。由and连接两个句子，成为并列句，再一个which引导的定语从句。
2. 有问题的句子的列举
考生写的句子容易出现三个问题：一是使用破碎句，二是使用接连句，三是句子连接不正确。
1). 破碎句
所谓破碎句，就是句子不完整，通常是没有谓语(或者说谓语是动词的非谓语形式，如分词)，或者是从句单独成句。
破碎句：She singing alone. (无谓语，singing是现在分词)
正确句：She is singing alone.
破碎句：He did not come. Because he was sick. (从句单独成句)
正确句：He did not come because he was sick.
2).接连句
所谓接连据，就是两个句子直接连在一起，既未使用连词，也未使用正确的标点符号。
接连句: Professionals such as lawyers or accountants usually work longer hours than factory workers they have greater freedom in planning their time.
正确句一: Professionals such as lawyers or accountants usually work longer hours than factory workers. However, they have greater freedom in planning their time.
正确句二: Professionals such as lawyers or accountants usually work longer hours than factory workers; however, they have greater freedom in planning their time.
3).句子连接不正确
所谓句子连接不正确，就是两个独立的句子之间以逗号连接，这是不合英语语法的。正确的做法是以连词、分号、冒号、句号等连接两个句子。
不正确句: Breaking chalk into two pieces is a physical change, there is no change in the composition of the chalk.
正确句： Breaking chalk into two pieces is a physical change, so there is no change in the composition of the chalk.
II 高分表达
除了在句式上长短句相结合准确表达外，新通海外考试研究中心建议新托福考生要使用一些特殊的句式，以使句型多样化。句型多样化也是作文得到高分的条件之一。除了我们之前经常提到的高分句式，如倒装句、强调句、状语前置、插入语等，笔者还提出另外一个句式的多样变化，即主语多样化。下面笔者将列举几个句子概括介绍前面四种句型，而重点分析主语多样化。
正常句： Luck only works in extreme cases.
倒装句： Only in extreme cases does luck work.(否定词位于句首的倒装。)
正常句： The internet provides people access to the latest information.
强调句： It is the internet that provides people access to the latest information. (强调the internet)
正常句： The environment has been deteriorating severely along with the development of industry.
状语前置句： Along with the accelerating development of industry, the environment has been deteriorating severely.
正常句： However, new zoos try to duplicate animals’ natural habitats as much as possible and give animals a comfortable amount of space.
插入语： New zoos, however, try to duplicate animals’ natural habitats as much as possible and give animals a comfortable amount of space. (连词however做插入语)
主语多样
1. 她突然想到了一个主意。
She suddenly had an idea.
通常情况下，考生会马上对这句话进行翻译，基本不会动句子结构。但是以人作为主语的英语句子总是不能够很吸引人，所以这个句子如果稍微做下修改，以后面的宾语“主意”做主语，这个句子会发生一些变化。
An idea suddenly occurred to her.
2. 他开车心不在焉，几乎闯祸。
He was absent-minded when driving, and almost caused an accident.
这句话依然是拿人做主语，稍微改一下，把心不在焉这个形容词的名词形式做主语，会大不相同。
His absence of mind during driving nearly caused an accident.
3. 美利坚合众国创立于1789年。
The United States of America was founded in 1789.
这句话没有任何错误，但是不够多样，可以用时间作主语。
The year 1789 witnessed the founding of the United States of America.
III 实用句型
在文章的最后，新通海外考试研究中心为大家列举几个新托福考试中可以使用的套用句型，为一些写句子摸不着头绪的考生提供帮助。
1. It pays to make great efforts to prepare for TOEFL-ibt.
努力准备新托福考试是值得的。
2. Nothing is more important than to receive education.
没有比接受教育更重要的了。
3. The reason why the white-collars suffer increasing work-related stress is that they pursue work achievement in career.
白领压力日益增加的原因是他们在事业上有所追求。
4. It is time the related department took proper measures.
(虚拟句式)相关部门早该采取适当的措施了。
以上是托福写作教你怎样造句的内容，一篇好的文章是由一个个句子堆砌起来的，每一句话都是这篇文章的重点我们万万不可忽视，在这里面不仅仅体现了考生的语法用词，还能体现考生对于题目的思路看法，以及对美国地道用语的运用。
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托福写作问题句改进50例
托福写作中的一些句型错误屡见不鲜，一些考生光顾着背诵经典句来加分，但是大家不能忽略打好基础的重要性，情愿少一些华丽的辞藻，也要注意不要用错句型犯一些低级错误，谨记在作文中想要提高和有所突破，打好基础是大前提，之后再考虑修饰问题。
1. The artist's work pushes our civilization to a higher level。
改进：Artists' work upgrades our civilization。
2. For example， you work in a big factory。
改进： Suppose you work in a big factory。
3. You'll find you are fit for business and you can make it your main job。
改进：You'll find that you are cut out for business and you can make it your career。
4. We will own nothing at all if we depend on luck。
改进： We will get nowhere if we rely on luck。
5. He will get a higher salary to improve his living level。
改进： He will get a higher salary， thus improving his life。
6. Their brain is still very young。
改进： They are still immature。
7. Dissatisfaction makes people produce desire for better things。
改进： Dissatisfaction impels people for the better。
8. They can't analyze clearly what is right and what is wrong。
改进： They cannot tell right from wrong。
9. It will help children to form a good habit of dealing with time。
改进： It will help children learn to make good use of time。
10. Though it is not the best job， it afford to his life。
改进： Though it is not the best job， a job is a job. He can make ends meet with it。
11. Since people are always not satisfied with their present situation， they want further development。
改进： Since people are never satisfied with their status quo， they want further development。
12. The only thing they need to do is to find a job which can easily get big money。
改进： The only thing they need to do is to find a job that can bring them big money。
13. They like an active life but not a peaceful life。
改进： They like an active life rather than a peaceful one。
14. Some cigarettes may even cost a larger sum of money。
改进： Some cigarettes may cost even more。
15. Firstly， dissatisfaction encourages the discovery of new products。
改进： Firstly， dissatisfaction encourages the invention of new products。
16. Insgroupsto suit the needs of enteringsintoswork， students must grasp some technical skills。
改进： Insgroupsto meet the needs of future work， students must learn some practical skills。
17. It is very necessary more qualified scientists and technicians。
改进： Qualified scientists and technicians are in great demand。
18. This knowledge will become a part of your body。
改进： This knowledge will become part of you。
19. They cannot think clearly。
改进： They cannot think straight。
20. Money can improve their living standard。
改进： Money can improve their life。
21. Parents always think that children will get a good job and earn a lot of money。
改进： Parents always expect their children to get a good job and earn a lot of money。
22. If a student only cares about money， will lead to be unhappy all his life。
改进： If a student only cares about money， he will be misled and will be unhappy all his life。
23. One purpose of education is to study the way in which he studies later。
改进： One purpose of education is to learn to learn。
24. Many parents arrange their children go to learn piano。
改进： Many parents send their children to piano classes。
25. When I want to absorb somebody else's opinion， I will study with others。
改进： When I need second opinion， I will study with others。
26. Eating outside has the most advantage that we can go at any time when we finish eating without doing any washing。
改进： The best part of eating out is that we can leave everything behind after meal。
27. Smoking can help you relax your mind。
改进： Cigarettes can help you relax。
28. What's about nonsmokers?
改进： What about nonsmokers?
29. Why not to be a non-smoker?
改进： Why not be a non-smoker?
30. Everyone will have many friends in his life。
改进： Everyone has friends in his life。
31. I am not good at maths，but English
改进： I am good not at mathematics but at English/ My strength is not mathematics but English。
32. Who is the proper person to make up his minds about children's leisure time?
改进： Who is the proper person to plan children's leisure time?
33.It is children who clear about their interests。
改进： It is children who are clear about their own interests。
34. I agree the latter idea。
改进： I agree with the latter idea。
35. Many people dissatisfy with the status quo。
改进： Many people are dissatisfied with the status quo。
36. So I feel breathe more comfortably now。
改进： So I feel more comfortable now when I breathe。
37. People should learn knowledge no matter how old they are。
改进：People should learn no matter how old they are/ People are never too old to learn。
38. No one knows all the things。
改进： No one knows everything。
39. I want to live in a quiet place to admire peaceful life。
改进： I want to live in a quiet place to enjoy peaceful life。
40. Each form ofshavingsfriends has its advantages。
改进： Each way of choosing friends has its advantages。
41. I was admitted to a key university for which few dared to sign up。
改进： I was admitted to a key university to which few dared to apply。
42. Luckily， he recognized an American professor。
改进： Luckily， he knew an American professor。
43. They will learn the bad habits。
改进： They will develop bad habits。
44. In this continued process， people make progress。
改进： In this cycle， people make progress。
45. Lastly， higher education is equal to higher salary。
改进： Lastly， higher education means higher salary。
46. By making friends who are different from ourselves， we can make up for deficiency。
改进： By making friends who are different from ourselves， we can make up for our shortcomings。
47. A wrong decision will bring even worse fact。
改进： A wrong decision will bring even worse result。
48. You spend all your life to fulfill your willing。
改进： You devote all your life to the fulfillment of your dream。
49. Children should be taught disciplines insgroupsto avoid unnecessary lost。
改进： Children should be taught discipline insgroupsto avoid unnecessary loss。
50. I felt alone。
改进： I felt lonely。
以上就是托福写作中经常出现的问题，一篇优秀的英语作文在内容和语言两方面应是一个统一体，任何一方面的欠缺都会直接影响到作文的质量。以上语句中的出现的常见错误，希望考生能够避免。为了文章的华丽偏用一些另类语句会出彩，但是若写作中有问题，可是得不偿失。
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新托福考试作文中常见的50例病句(上)
新托福作文中如果出现出病句，对大家想要在新托福写作中取得好成绩的影响是很大的 。下面例举的50个病句是考生们在完成新托福作文时经常出现的，我们一起来看看修改后的句子，避免犯同样的错误。
1. The artist's work pushes our civilization to a higher level.
改进：Artists' work upgrades our civilization.
2. For example， you work in a big factory.
改进： Suppose you work in a big factory.
3. You'll find you are fit for business and you can make it your main job.
改进：You'll find that you are cut out for business and you can make it your career.
4. We will own nothing at all if we depend on luck.
改进： We will get nowhere if we rely on luck.
5. He will get a higher salary to improve his living level.
改进： He will get a higher salary， thus improving his life.
6. Their brain is still very young.
改进： They are still immature.
7. Dissatisfaction makes people produce desire for better things.
改进：Dissatisfaction impels people for the better.
8. They can't analyze clearly what is right and what is wrong.
改进： They cannot tell right from wrong.
9. It will help children to form a good habit of dealing with time.
改进： It will help children learn to make good use of time.
10. Though it is not the best job， it afford to his life.
改进： Though it is not the best job， a job is a job. He can make ends meet with it.
11. Since people are always not satisfied with their present situation， they want further development.
改进： Since people are never satisfied with their status quo， they want further development.
12. The only thing they need to do is to find a job which can easily get big money.
改进： The only thing they need to do is to find a job that can bring them big money.
13. They like an active life but not a peaceful life.
改进： They like an active life rather than a peaceful one.
14. Some cigarettes may even cost a larger sum of money.
改进： Some cigarettes may cost even more.
15. Firstly， dissatisfaction encourages the discovery of new products.
改进： Firstly， dissatisfaction encourages the invention of new products.
16. Insgroupsto suit the needs of enteringsintoswork， students must grasp some technical skills.
改进： Insgroupsto meet the needs of future work， students must learn some practical skills.
17. It is very necessary more qualified scientists and technicians.
改进： Qualified scientists and technicians are in great demand.
18. This knowledge will become a part of your body.
改进： This knowledge will become part of you.
19. They cannot think clearly.
改进： They cannot think straight.
20. Money can improve their living standard.
改进： Money can improve their life.
21. Parents always think that children will get a good job and earn a lot of money.
改进： Parents always expect their children to get a good job and earn a lot of money.
22. If a student only cares about money， will lead to be unhappy all his life.
改进： If a student only cares about money， he will be misled and will be unhappy all his life.
23. One purpose of education is to study the way in which he studies later.
改进： One purpose of education is to learn to learn.
24. Many parents arrange their children go to learn piano.
改进： Many parents send their children to piano classes.
25. When I want to absorb somebody else's opinion， I will study with others.
改进：When I need second opinion， I will study with others.
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新托福考试作文中常见的50例病句(下)
新托福作文中如果出现出病句，对大家想要在新托福写作中取得好成绩的影响是很大的 。下面例举的50个病句是考生们在完成新托福作文时经常出现的，我们一起来看看修改后的句子，避免犯同样的错误。
26. Eating outside has the most advantage that we can go at any time when we finish eating without doing any washing.
改进： The best part of eating out is that we can leave everything behind after meal.
27. Smoking can help you relax your mind.
改进： Cigarettes can help you relax.
28. What's about nonsmokers?
改进： What about nonsmokers?
29. Why not to be a non-smoker?
改进： Why not be a non-smoker?
30. Everyone will have many friends in his life.
改进： Everyone has friends in his life.
31. I am not good at maths， but English.
改进： I am good not at mathematics but at English/ My strength is not mathematics but English.
32. Who is the proper person to make up his minds about children's leisure time?
改进： Who is the proper person to plan children's leisure time?
33.It is children who clear about their interests.
改进： It is children who are clear about their own interests.
34. I agree the latter idea.
改进： I agree with the latter idea.
35. Many people dissatisfy with the status quo.
改进： Many people are dissatisfied with the status quo.
36. So I feel breathe more comfortably now.
改进： So I feel more comfortable now when I breathe.
37. People should learn knowledge no matter how old they are.
改进：People should learn no matter how old they are/ People are never too old to learn.
38. No one knows all the things.
改进： No one knows everything.
39. I want to live in a quiet place to admire peaceful life.
改进： I want to live in a quiet place to enjoy peaceful life.
40. Each form ofshavingsfriends has its advantages.
改进： Each way of choosing friends has its advantages.
41. I was admitted to a key university for which few dared to sign up.
改进： I was admitted to a key university to which few dared to apply.
42. Luckily， he recognized an American professor.
改进： Luckily， he knew an American professor.
43. They will learn the bad habits.
改进： They will develop bad habits.
44. In this continued process， people make progress.
改进： In this cycle， people make progress.
45. Lastly， higher education is equal to higher salary.
改进： Lastly， higher education means higher salary.
46. By making friends who are different from ourselves， we can make up for deficiency.
改进： By making friends who are different from ourselves， we can make up for our shortcomings.
47. A wrong decision will bring even worse fact.
改进： A wrong decision will bring even worse result.
48. You spend all your life to fulfill your willing.
改进： You devote all your life to the fulfillment of your dream.
49. Children should be taught disciplines insgroupsto avoid unnecessary lost.
改进： Children should be taught discipline insgroupsto avoid unnecessary loss.
50. I felt alone.
改进： I felt lonely.
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托福考试作文常见病句及改进
1. The artist’s work pushes our civilization to a higher level.
改进：Artists’ work upgrades our civilization.
2. For example, you work in a big factory.
改进: Suppose you work in a big factory.
3. You’ll find you are fit for business and you can make it your main job.
改进：You’ll find that you are cut out for business and you can make it your career.
4. We will own nothing at all if we depend on luck.
改进: We will get nowhere if we rely on luck.
5. He will get a higher salary to improve his living level.
改进: He will get a higher salary, thus improving his life.
6. Their brain is still very young.
改进: They are still immature.
7. Dissatisfaction makes people produce desire for better things.
改进: Dissatisfaction impels people for the better.
8. They can’t analyze clearly what is right and what is wrong.
改进: They cannot tell right from wrong.
9. It will help children to form a good habit of dealing with time.
改进: It will help children learn to make good use of time.
10. Though it is not the best job, it afford to his life.
改进: Though it is not the best job, a job is a job. He can make ends meet with it.
11. Since people are always not satisfied with their present situation, they want further development.
改进: Since people are never satisfied with their status quo, they want further development.
12. The only thing they need to do is to find a job which can easily get big money.
改进: The only thing they need to do is to find a job that can bring them big money.
13. They like an active life but not a peaceful life.
改进: They like an active life rather than a peaceful one.
拨打免费电话400-618-0272，咨询托福疑难。
即日起——7月31日
（活动范围：仅限拜访江东校区、首次上门客户）
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抢能量大战VIP热线：
免费咨询电话：400-618-0272、0574- 87736833
报班拿下好优惠：
＆免费咨询电话：400-618- 0272
以上7种班型，报读一期且缴纳全款享9折优惠；两期连报且缴纳全款享8.8折优惠；三期连报且缴纳全 款享8.5折优惠，除以上情况外，其余无优惠。
考生应避免的25种病句（一）
下面25句句子是考生常写的一些病句，我们特地为考生进行了改正，希望考生注意这方面的错误。
1. I am not good at maths, but English
改进: I am good not at mathematics but at English/ My strength is not mathematics but English.
2. Who is the proper person to make up his minds about children’s leisure time?
改进: Who is the proper person to plan children’s leisure time?
3.It is children who clear about their interests.
改进: It is children who are clear about their own interests.
4. I agree the latter idea.(漏掉介词是大家在托福写作中低分的常见病句。)
改进: I agree with the latter idea.
5. Many people dissatisfy with the status quo.
改进: Many people are dissatisfied with the status quo.
6. So I feel breathe more comfortably now.
改进: So I feel more comfortable now when I breathe.
7. People should learn knowledge no matter how old they are.(语义重复也是大家在托福写作中导致低分的主要原因)
改进：People should learn no matter how old they are/ People are never too old to learn.
8. No one knows all the things.
改进: No one knows everything.
9. I want to live in a quiet place to admire peaceful life.
改进: I want to live in a quiet place to enjoy peaceful life.
10. Each form of shavings friends has its advantages.
改进: Each way of choosing friends has its advantages.
11. I was admitted to a Key University for which few dared to sign up.
改进: I was admitted to a Key University to which few dared to apply.
12. Luckily, he recognized an American professor.
改进: Luckily, he knew an American professor.
13. They will learn the bad habits.
改进: They will develop bad habits.
14. In this continued process, people make progress.
改进: In this cycle, people make progress.
15. Lastly, higher education is equal to higher salary.
改进: Lastly, higher education means higher salary.
16. By making friends who are different from ourselves, we can make up for deficiency.
改进: By making friends who are different from ourselves, we can make up for our shortcomings.
17. A wrong decision will bring even worse fact.
改进: A wrong decision will bring even worse result.
18. You spend all your life to fulfill your willing.
改进: You devote all your life to the fulfillment of your dream.
19. Children should be taught disciplines in groups to avoid unnecessary lost.
改进: Children should be taught discipline in groups to avoid unnecessary loss.
20. I felt alone.
21. Eating outside has the most advantage that we can go at any time when we finish eating without doing any washing.
改进: The best part of eating out is that we can leave everything behind after meal.
22. Smoking can help you relax your mind.
改进: Cigarettes can help you relax.
23. What’s about nonsmokers?
改进: What about nonsmokers?
24. Why not to be a non-smoker?
改进: Why not be a non-smoker?
25. Everyone will have many friends in his life.
改进: Everyone has friends in his life.
上面这些错误是考生导致低分的主要原因，考生为了防止自己做无用功，一定要在考前多检查自己的作文，也可以让别人帮你一起看，这样你就知道你的弱点在哪里了。
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即日起——7月31日
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抢能量大战VIP热线：
免费咨询电话：400-618-0272、0574- 87736833
报班拿下好优惠：
＆免费咨询电话：400-618- 0272
以上7种班型，报读一期且缴纳全款享9折优惠；两期连报且缴纳全款享8.8折优惠；三期连报且缴纳全 款享8.5折优惠，除以上情况外，其余无优惠。
考生应避免的25种病句（二）
大陆语系与欧美语系在本质上有很大的不同，考生会在写作中写出许多中国式英语，下面就为大家罗列了25种考生会犯的错误，并将它们一一改正过来，希望对考生有帮助。
1. The artist’s work pushes our civilization to a higher level.
改进：Artists’ work upgrades our civilization.
2. For example, you work in a big factory.(这个病句在托福写作中出现的很多。)
改进: Suppose you work in a big factory.
3. You’ll find you are fit for business and you can make it your main job.
改进：You’ll find that you are cut out for business and you can make it your career.
4. We will own nothing at all if we depend on luck.
改进: We will get nowhere if we rely on luck.
5. He will get a higher salary to improve his living level.
改进: He will get a higher salary, thus improving his life.
6. Their brain is still very young.(这个病句在托福写作中出现的很多。)
改进: They are still immature.
7. Dissatisfaction makes people produce desire for better things.
改进: Dissatisfaction impels people for the better.
8. They can’t analyze clearly what is right and what is wrong.
改进: They cannot tell right from wrong.
9. It will help children to form a good habit of dealing with time.
改进: It will help children learn to make good use of time.
10. Though it is not the best job, it afford to his life.
改进: Though it is not the best job, a job is a job. He can make ends meet with it.
11. Since people are always not satisfied with their present situation, they want further development.
改进: Since people are never satisfied with their status quo, they want further development.
12. The only thing they need to do is to find a job which can easily get big money.
改进: The only thing they need to do is to find a job that can bring them big money.
13. They like an active life but not a peaceful life.
改进: They like an active life rather than a peaceful one.
14. Some cigarettes may even cost a larger sum of money.
改进: Some cigarettes may cost even more.
15. Firstly, dissatisfaction encourages the discovery of new products.
改进: Firstly, dissatisfaction encourages the invention of new products.
16. Insgroupsto suit the needs of enteringsintoswork, students must grasp some technical skills.
改进: Insgroupsto meet the needs of future work, students must learn some practical skills.
17. It is very necessary more qualified scientists and technicians.
改进: Qualified scientists and technicians are in great demand.
18. This knowledge will become a part of your body.
改进: This knowledge will become part of you.
19. They cannot think clearly.
改进: They cannot think straight.
20. Money can improve their living standard.
改进: Money can improve their life.
21. Parents always think that children will get a good job and earn a lot of money.
改进: Parents always expect their children to get a good job and earn a lot of money.
22. If a student only cares about money, will lead to be unhappy all his life.
改进: If a student only cares about money, he will be misled and will be unhappy all his life.
23. One purpose of education is to study the way in which he studies later.
改进: One purpose of education is to learn to learn.
24. Many parents arrange their children go to learn piano.(这种典型的中式思维的病句在托福写作中出现的很多。)
改进: Many parents send their children to piano classes.
25. When I want to absorb somebody else’s opinion, I will study with others.
改进: When I need second opinion, I will study with others.
考生可以发现有些病句，如果我们不提出来，考生自己是很难发现有问题，所以考生最好多结合这次的病句对自己的文章进行一次大检查。
拨打免费电话400-618-0272，咨询托福疑难。
即日起——7月31日
（活动范围：仅限拜访江东校区、首次上门客户）
新通外语宁波专修学校，为更好的服务客户，特推出免费“吃喝玩乐”，“来 ”就有礼！“买”更便宜！艾玛！太嗨森了！还在等什么？赶快来参与吧，再犹豫就晚了！ ＆免费咨询电话：400-618-0272
“来就送”优惠尊享：
A礼包：上门就送价值500元的课程抵用券
B礼包：上门，主要关注并转发微信：shinywaynb且 进行英语水平测试就可获得玩乐礼包：海上国际影城通票1张，游学书籍1本
C礼包：上门，报班学习即可获得吃喝玩乐大礼包： 饮料2瓶，20元绿姿蛋糕券，海上国际影城通票2张，游学书籍1本
免费领奖地址：＆ 免费咨询电话：400-618-0272
江东区中山东路1083号世纪东方商业广场COB写字楼9层（地铁1号线直达，福明站下车即可）
抢能量大战VIP热线：
免费咨询电话：400-618-0272、0574- 87736833
报班拿下好优惠：
＆免费咨询电话：400-618- 0272
以上7种班型，报读一期且缴纳全款享9折优惠；两期连报且缴纳全款享8.8折优惠；三期连报且缴纳全 款享8.5折优惠，除以上情况外，其余无优惠。
考生应避免的25种病句（三）
大陆语系与欧美语系在本质上有很大的不同，考生会在写作中写出许多中国式英语，下面就为大家罗列了25种考生会犯的错误，并将它们一一改正过来，希望对考生有帮助。
1. Eating outside has the most advantage that we can go at any time when we finish eating without doing any washing.
改进： The best part of eating out is that we can leave everything behind after meal.
2. Smoking can help you relax your mind.
改进： Cigarettes can help you relax.
3. What's about nonsmokers?
改进： What about nonsmokers?
4. Why not to be a non-smoker?
改进： Why not be a non-smoker?
5. Everyone will have many friends in his life.
改进： Everyone has friends in his life.
6. I am not good at maths， but English.
改进： I am good not at mathematics but at English/ My strength is not mathematics but English.
7. Who is the proper person to make up his minds about children's leisure time?
改进： Who is the proper person to plan children's leisure time?
8.It is children who clear about their interests.
改进： It is children who are clear about their own interests.
9. I agree the latter idea.
改进： I agree with the latter idea.
10. Many people dissatisfy with the status quo.
改进： Many people are dissatisfied with the status quo.
11. So I feel breathe more comfortably now.
改进： So I feel more comfortable now when I breathe.
12. People should learn knowledge no matter how old they are.
改进：People should learn no matter how old they are/ People are never too old to learn.
13. No one knows all the things.
改进： No one knows everything.
14. I want to live in a quiet place to admire peaceful life.
改进： I want to live in a quiet place to enjoy peaceful life.
15. Each form ofshavingsfriends has its advantages.
改进： Each way of choosing friends has its advantages.
16. I was admitted to a key university for which few dared to sign up.
改进： I was admitted to a key university to which few dared to apply.
17. Luckily， he recognized an American professor.
改进： Luckily， he knew an American professor.
18. They will learn the bad habits.
改进： They will develop bad habits.
19. In this continued process， people make progress.
改进： In this cycle， people make progress.
20. Lastly， higher education is equal to higher salary.
改进： Lastly， higher education means higher salary.
21. By making friends who are different from ourselves， we can make up for deficiency.
改进： By making friends who are different from ourselves， we can make up for our shortcomings.
22. A wrong decision will bring even worse fact.
改进： A wrong decision will bring even worse result.
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